Bonjour il faut corrigé le texte. My manga fly me to the new world, a world in black and white. The illustrations are beautiful as a thousand stars in the shy I
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Bonjour il faut corrigé le texte.
My manga fly me to the new world,
a world in black and white.
The illustrations are beautiful as
a thousand stars in the shy
It is easy to carry
as a multicolored stone
from the outside and
gray from the inside.
My manga should not stay
in the sun otherwise it
turn yellow as the sun,
the sun the emblème of Japan.
Japan the pay of the manga.
It's really a legend of literature,
it's a phonix that is
renewed at each chapter.
My manga fly me to the new world,
a world in black and white.
The illustrations are beautiful as
a thousand stars in the shy
It is easy to carry
as a multicolored stone
from the outside and
gray from the inside.
My manga should not stay
in the sun otherwise it
turn yellow as the sun,
the sun the emblème of Japan.
Japan the pay of the manga.
It's really a legend of literature,
it's a phonix that is
renewed at each chapter.
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1. Réponse nathea
bonjour
je reprends tes mots...je corrige juste le texte (enfin j'essaie...)
My manga flies me in a new world,
A world in black and white (A black and white world)
The illustrations (pictures) are beautiful
As a thousand stars in the sky.
It is easy to carry (tu veux dire emmener avec soi ? to travel with..??)
As a multicolored stone
From the outside
And grey, from the inside.
My manga shouldn't stay
In the sun, otherwise (In the bright light...pour pas dire 2 fois "sun" ???)
It turns yellow as the sun,
Sun, emblem (symbol) of Japan.
Japan, country of mangas
Real legend of literature
As a phoenix
Renewed at each chapter (Reborn chapter after chapter)
As a phoenix who would
Renew at each chapter (Be reborn chapter after chapter)
bon, j'ai corrigé les fautes (turns, flies, grey, phoenix......) et essayer de remettre certains petits mots dans les vers suivants .
Je t'ai fait des suggestions entre ( ); j'ai pas pu m'en empêcher !!!. A toi de décider :)
Bonne soirée :)